tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post1266948588437455907..comments2024-01-02T16:42:15.732-05:00Comments on Redlines and Deadlines: Stunning Starts CritiquesECPI Editorshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00569261288668237013noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post-154985259992242132008-03-25T15:59:00.000-04:002008-03-25T15:59:00.000-04:00Thank you so much for your valuable critique on my...Thank you so much for your valuable critique on my first paragraph. After being stuck in bed all weekend (not in a good way either *grins* but with that rotten flu) going to your site and finding myself selected as a good start was an incredible spirit booster.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post-33742528620518402352008-03-21T18:27:00.000-04:002008-03-21T18:27:00.000-04:00Can we still submit our first lines? I'd love to g...Can we still submit our first lines? <BR/><BR/>I'd love to get an opinion on how it's going from an agent's point of view.Ada [The Duchess]https://www.blogger.com/profile/17440830191796863095noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post-91506328329147902712008-03-21T17:33:00.000-04:002008-03-21T17:33:00.000-04:00Thanks for your advice- I ended up cutting the cha...Thanks for your advice- I ended up cutting the chapter (part of a nitwit framing device) but I may use that opening for a short story...<BR/><BR/>Would be interested to hear any advice on transitions. <BR/><BR/>Many thanks.<BR/><BR/>JamesAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post-69715985418093258602008-03-21T12:46:00.000-04:002008-03-21T12:46:00.000-04:00Thank you. I appreciate your comments and will wor...Thank you. I appreciate your comments and will work on the paragraph.<BR/><BR/>As an aside, I had meant to make the reader feel like she/he were entering the scene, knowing that there had to be more before it. My other starts never read right to me.<BR/><BR/>Again, thank you.Sarabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05044786582426844753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post-52144189222561427282008-03-21T12:13:00.000-04:002008-03-21T12:13:00.000-04:00It's great to see these feedbacks; but looking at ...It's great to see these feedbacks; but looking at everyone's paragraphs, I realize I should have added slightly more beyond the first line. :S Ha ha, live and learn, live and learn.Rachel Glasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11249333616482426920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8983687699975451453.post-56282416734127746782008-03-21T10:37:00.000-04:002008-03-21T10:37:00.000-04:00Fun post! I hope y'all do many more of these one m...Fun post! I hope y'all do many more of these one minute critiques.astrologymemphis.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08094432734141490681noreply@blogger.com